The Heroes of Little Springs; Comment Section

It's something you might want to keep a conscious effort on though. Because although you might had visualized the entire epic thing in your mind, from reading what you had posted it was rather lacking in my mind. It didn't engage me all that much. It was rather underwhelming, I mean no offense...

if you want me to fix it and change it, I will...

No no, it's fine as is. I'm just saying keep that in mind later. I know what is often in my mind can seem really exciting, but I often need a lot of description and lines to get that across. Our minds run miles a minute, but the same can't be said about our description and or writing skills.

I'm going to get both this and the Detective story up and running again also soon (whenever that may be)

I have another question XD lol

Does your post indicate a time skip? I.e. are the events Jet is currently going through happening at about the same time Quiver is dealing with her stuff or is it before or after those events?

It's like before and after.

So Quiver had enough time to get from point A to point B?

No Jet died a gruesome death. :P

well he could have survived torture. you never know XD

This is Quiver or perhaps your cue to know where to go.

i know, i did a post already

Right, just got it.

What kind of stuff is in the room they're currently in. Like, is it all high tech stuff or is it kind of abandoned?

Partially abandoned partially high tech, but the high tech stuff is kind of trashed once Quiver and the one stupid thug screwed it all up.

okay...i need to think this over then. the only thing thats sticking in my head is the fact grass type pokemon beat guys like this XD